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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
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Students
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 should pay their tuition fees rather
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 take scholarships as they benefit from them.
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 essay completely disagrees with the idea that
students
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 should not take any help from
society
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 to pay their university expenses.
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, A student is an asset to a
country
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,
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,
Education
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 is the backbone of a nation and
students
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 are the pillar of that backbone. All-out improvement of an
education
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 system has long-term implications for a
country
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. Investment in a student is one of the best ways to improve a whole
society
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. A student is the future of his
society
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 for its well-being
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 and is responsible for the development of his motherland.
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, in Finland, A European
country
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,
education
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 is free for all,
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 is how they have been followed by the world in
education
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 systems. So a university should have a weaver system running for all of the
students
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. There might be a lot of talent who require funding to carry
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out his
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education
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. Since
education
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 is the backbone of a nation they should not waste it by not providing financial help. Maybe he will get the most benefit out of it but research or any innovation by that genius may help a
country
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 which is uncountable.
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, Bangladesh is one of the leading countries
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 wasting their young talent not by giving them any scholarship or any kind of opportunity to flourish. In conclusion,
Students
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 should get weaver from their tuition fees and
society
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 should help them to build a better
society
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.
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 will not help the
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 individually only but
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 the globe as well.
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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