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Writing Task 1: Coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

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The bar chart illustrates the data from a survey about
coffee
 and tea buying and drinking habits in five
cities
 in Australia.
Overall
, it is evident that the number of people who bought fresh
coffee
 in the
last
 4
weeks
 in Melbourne has peaked compared to other
cities
,
while
 the individuals who went to a cafe for
coffee
 or tea in the
last
 4
weeks
 in Brisbane and Adelaide are lacking compared to other
cities
. Looking for more details, the data of people who spent time purchasing fresh
coffee
 in the
last
 4
weeks
 in Melbourne has
submited
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submitted
 at 63%, in Hobart is around 62% and
similarly
, in Sydney is around 61% respectively.
In contrast
, the individuals who went to
cafe
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cafes
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for
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to
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 purchase
coffee
 or tea in the
last
 4
weeks
 in Brisbane and Adelaide
lacked
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were
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 approximately 33%. Regarding
to
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apply
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the rate of individuals
bought
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who bought
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 instant
coffee
 in  the
last
 4
weeks
 in Hobart was
higest
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higher
 compared to other
cities
 at around 50%.
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introduction conclusion
Ensure that your introduction clearly sets up what the graph shows and your conclusion effectively summarises the main trends without repeating details from the body of the report.
logical structure
Organise your report into clear paragraphs, each one focussing on a specific aspect of the data. Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
supported main points
Provide specific data points to support the trends you describe, and ensure you compare data for all categories and all cities where relevant.
complete response
Make sure to fully develop your response to include all important trends and to ensure you give an overview in addition to selecting significant data points to discuss.
clear comprehensive ideas
Include specific data and make more comparisons between data points to show a more comprehensive understanding of the chart. Your writing should accurately reflect the data and its significance.
relevant specific examples
Use a variety of structures and vocabulary to describe the data adequately. Check that your descriptions are accurate and that percentages are reported correctly.

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