Life nowadays is generally more stressful than in the past. Give some reasons why people suffer more from stress nowadays, and say what they can do to reduce it.

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people
are
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suffering from
stress
than
people
in the past.
This
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will discuss the main causes of why
people
struggle
from
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stress
nowadays including increased job
presssures
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pressures
and their
life style
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lifestyle
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.
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will
also
suggest solutions to these problems including improving one's
work -life
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work-life
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balance and healthy lifestyle.
People
get more
stress
from their
job
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jobs
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because
high
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apply
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of pressure that they have. Their unbalance
work-life
as
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is
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a result of working longer hours than before. These
unfavorable
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conditions
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happens
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because
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of
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the workforce is a competitive domain.
For example
, some
people
who
work
in
a
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office
they
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have to start at 8am to 4pm.
Nevertheless
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they have to
work
overtime because of lack of time that they have to
comple
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comply
complete
end month reports.
This
often results in mental and physical suffering because they have to
work
overtime which can be more stressful. Maintaining a good
work-life
balace
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balance
and improving
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle are both critical
mitigating
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to mitigating
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stress
.
People
need to realise that if they only live for
work
they
fill
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will
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suffer either mentally or physically and
a
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poor health will
further
these issues.
For instance
, many
emplyees
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employees
burn out from working too much and neglecting the foods they eat.
Therefore
, in order to make a good
work-life
balance, must include a better ratio of
work
, rest, recreation, exercise and consumption an healthy food. In conclusion, fast changes
on
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in
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environment
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has
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impact
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for
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on
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someone's
stressful
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stress
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.
This
essay
discussed how
stress
if
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is
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often caused by intense
workjob
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work
pressures and
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an unbalance
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unbalance
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unbalanced
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work-life
.
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essay
also
sugested
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suggested
suggests
that the solutions to
this
problem are to manage a better
work-life
balance and to eat healthier.
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