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Life nowadays is generally more stressful than in the past. Give some reasons why people suffer more from stress nowadays, and say what they can do to reduce it.

#life #people #stress
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people
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increasingly
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 suffering from
stress
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 than
people
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 in the past.
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 will discuss the main causes of why
people
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 struggle
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stress
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 nowadays including increased job
presssures
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pressures
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life style
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lifestyle
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 will
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 suggest solutions to these problems including improving one's
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work -life
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work-life
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 balance and healthy lifestyle.
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 get more
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 from their
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apply
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of pressure that they have. Their unbalance
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work-life
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as
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 a result of working longer hours than before. These
unfavorable
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unfavourable
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 conditions
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happens
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of
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the workforce is a competitive domain.
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, some
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work
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 office
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have to start at 8am to 4pm.
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Nevertheless
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 they have to
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 overtime because of lack of time that they have to
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comply
complete
 end month reports.
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 often results in mental and physical suffering because they have to
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 overtime which can be more stressful. Maintaining a good
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work-life
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balace
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balance
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healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle are both critical
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to mitigating
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stress
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People
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 need to realise that if they only live for
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 they
fill
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will
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 suffer either mentally or physically and
a
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poor health will
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 these issues.
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, many
emplyees
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employees
 burn out from working too much and neglecting the foods they eat.
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, in order to make a good
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work-life
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 balance, must include a better ratio of
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, rest, recreation, exercise and consumption an healthy food. In conclusion, fast changes
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environment
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has
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impact
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for
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on
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stressful
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 discussed how
stress
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if
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is
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 often caused by intense
workjob
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work
 pressures and
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an unbalance
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unbalance
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work-life
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also
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sugested
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suggested
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 that the solutions to
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 problem are to manage a better
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work-life
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 balance and to eat healthier.
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