Life nowadays is generally more stressful than in the past. Give some reasons why people suffer more from stress nowadays, and say what they can do to reduce it.
Currently
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Currently,
people
are increasing
suffering from Change the word
increasingly
stress
than people
in the past. This
essay
will discuss the main causes of why people
struggle from
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with
stress
nowadays including increased job presssures
and their Correct your spelling
pressures
life style
. Correct your spelling
lifestyle
This
essay
will also
suggest solutions to these problems including improving one's work -life
balance and healthy lifestyle.
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work-life
People
get more stress
from their job
because Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
high
of pressure that they have. Their unbalance Correct word choice
apply
work-life
as
a result of working longer hours than before. These Correct your spelling
is
unfavorable
conditions Change the spelling
unfavourable
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happen
happens
because Correct subject-verb agreement
happen
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apply
of
the workforce is a competitive domain. Change preposition
apply
For example
, some people
who work
in a
office Change the article
an
they
have to start at 8am to 4pm. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Nevertheless
they have to Add a comma
Nevertheless,
work
overtime because of lack of time that they have to comple
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comply
complete
This
often results in mental and physical suffering because they have to work
overtime which can be more stressful.
Maintaining a good work-life
balace
and improving Correct your spelling
balance
healthy
lifestyle are both critical Correct article usage
a healthy
mitigating
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to mitigating
stress
. People
need to realise that if they only live for work
they fill
suffer either mentally or physically and Correct your spelling
will
a
poor health will Remove the article
apply
further
these issues. For instance
, many emplyees
burn out from working too much and neglecting the foods they eat. Correct your spelling
employees
Therefore
, in order to make a good work-life
balance, must include a better ratio of work
, rest, recreation, exercise and consumption an healthy food.
In conclusion, fast changes on
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in
environment
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the environment
has
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have
impact
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an impact
for
someone's Change preposition
on
stressful
. Replace the word
stress
This
essay
discussed how stress
if
often caused by intense Correct your spelling
is
workjob
pressures and Correct your spelling
work
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an unbalance
unbalance
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unbalanced
work-life
. This
essay
also
sugested
that the solutions to Correct your spelling
suggested
suggests
this
problem are to manage a better work-life
balance and to eat healthier.Submitted by oktiviay17
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