Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their doctors . Do you this this is a positive or negative development ?
Many people these days who have medical
illness
are searching to use different toy of medicine and Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
treatment
from their friends instead
of booking appointment
with the medical profession . Fix the agreement mistake
appointments
However
, in this
essay , I would explained
both views supported by examples and will provide my own opinion .
To initiate Wrong verb form
will explain
this
essay , one of the positives to visit
Wrong verb form
visiting
physician
looking for specific Correct article usage
a physician
treatment
and prescription is that to receive an ideal treatment
, investigate bold account
to determine the disease . Fix the agreement mistake
accounts
Therefore
, the doctor can prescribed
proper drugs with suitableChange the verb form
prescribe
dose
Fix the agreement mistake
doses
according to
the
gender , age , and weight as well. Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, the profession could follow up the
case to avoid any future complications . Change preposition
on the
However
, all kind
of health Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
disease
should be monitored and identified by medical doctors .
On Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
their
other hand , some people Change the word
the
are prefer
to have Change the verb form
prefer
the
alternative medicines and Correct article usage
apply
treatment
from other experiences which is not applicable for all persons and not induced
Wrong verb form
induce
recover
from their complaints . Replace the word
recovery
Moreover
, one point is
worth Unnecessary verb
apply
to
mentioning is these traditional medicines might Change preposition
apply
be affected
on person’s’ main organs Wrong verb form
affect
such
as heart
, liver , kidney and lungs . Correct article usage
the heart
As a result
, might be disturbed body hormones and enzymes as well . Furthermore
, complication
sooner or later might Fix the agreement mistake
complications
be
happen and the person will suffer all the time .
In Conclusion , due. To many drawbacks Unnecessary verb
apply
of
using alternative cures and might be harmful and more benefits from using Change preposition
to
chemical measured
medicines with Add a hyphen
chemical-measured
doctor’s
observation. Correct article usage
a doctor’s
However
, from my perspective , I will support acquired treatment
from
visiting medical clinics .Change preposition
by
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