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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans faces in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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One of the biggest threats is global warming and the alarming rates of sea levels rising are continuing to happen. I think that issue can cause some problems in the climate and the community.
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governments and individuals could take roles in solving the problem. The global warming problems may affect the climate change phenomena
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society. Nowadays, higher temperatures cause extreme weather
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 as long stormy rain and dry seasons in some parts of the world,
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 the weather often happens unexpectedly, resulting in natural hazards like floods and droughts.
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, these climate-related problems are
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 likely to impact the lives of the people. Take
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, agriculture is one of the sectors
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natural disasters, and it can lead to food shortages and food prices
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. To address these challenges, several solutions could be considered by both the government and individuals.
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, the government should invest more in renewable energy technologies
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public awareness
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 education campaigns. Individuals could
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 take part in reducing the global warming effect by promoting eco-friendly habits
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 as waste management and water saving. On top of that, people could
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 take public transportation rather than commuting with private cars to lower the pollution in the cities. In conclusion, the effects
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 global warming can harm both extreme climate and human lives;
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 can be solved by investing more in local sustainable energy and encouraging environmentally-friendly habits.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • sea levels
  • alarming rates
  • associated
  • possible solutions
  • increased flooding
  • loss of habitat
  • displacement
  • vulnerable
  • infrastructure
  • storm surges
  • economic impact
  • saltwater intrusion
  • freshwater systems
  • coastal defense systems
  • sea walls
  • levees
  • mangroves
  • coral reefs
  • wave energy
  • erosion
  • urban planning
  • climate resilience
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • mitigate
  • adaptive measures
  • public awareness
  • international cooperation
  • sustainable
  • environmental policies
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