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Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: ● Explain why you cannot go anymore ● Say who can go instead of you ● Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear Evanna, How are you? I hope you are healthy and happy.I was very excited to see your letter after a long time and thrilled that you planned to watch a film with me but unfortunately, I will not be able to accompany you,because my grandmother is hospitalized
due to
 illness and I need to be with her to take care.
Moreover
,I have a friend who came for vacation and was very excited to watch a film in the theatre. She is very much interest in action and romantic movies.She is very aware of the cinemas of which language is running in which theatre in the city.
Furthermore
,she is having a good experience in booking the tickets. So,I was thinking that she would be the right person to join you and believe you will enjoy her companion to watch the film. I look forward to seeing your reply. Best Wishes, Rani
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task achievement
Ensure that the letter fulfills all three bullet points of the task with adequate development for each. More information about the alternative friend could enhance the complete response score.
task achievement
Use a more suitable and consistent tone throughout the letter appropriate for informing a friend about a change in plans. While the tone here is mostly friendly, it can be more consistently informal and empathetic given the situation.
coherence cohesion
Improve the organization of ideas by using clear paragraphing with a distinct purpose for each. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, and the details provided should directly support that idea.
coherence cohesion
Open with a friendly greeting and close with an appropriate closing that matches the context of the letter. While a greeting is present, it can be more personable; the closing should also reflect a hope to meet or hear from the friend soon.
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