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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The given diagram shows information about consumption used by national consumers in five countries and three categories by 2002. The biggest amount of consumption of food, drinks, tobacco, and
also
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 leisure and education were used in
Turkey
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while
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 the biggest amount of consumers of clothing and
footwear
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 belonged to Italy.
Sweden
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 expended the smallest amount of clothing and
footwear
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. Leisure and education were the fewest
expenses
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 among all of these three categories. The percentage of using food, drinks, and tobacco in
Turkey
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 was 32.14%
while
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 in Ireland was about 29%. The number of
expenses
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 on these items in Spain approximately was 19%
while
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 in Italy and
Sweden
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 was between 17% to 14%. The percentage of national consumer expenditure on clothing and
footwear
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 in Italy was exactly9% despite of in
Turkey
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, Ireland, and Spain was about 6.5.
Sweden
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 had 5.40
percent
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per cent
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 of consumers who expended for clothing and
footwear
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.
Turkey
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had used
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spent
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 4.35% of its
expenses
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 on leisure and education
although
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 Italy and
Sweden
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 spent nearly 3.20% of their
expenses
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 in
this
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 category. Ireland and Spain used about 1 to 3
percent
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 of consumption in
this
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 category.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey, footwear, sweden, expenses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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