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The chart below give information on the ages of populations of yamen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The chart below give information on the ages of populations of yamen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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These pie charts illustrate the population which is divided into 3 sections of ages in 2000 and the prediction in 2050.
Moreover
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, they compare the difference between
Yeman
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 and Italy.
Overall
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, 60+
years
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 in Italy will grow a lot in 2050,
while
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 in
Yeman
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, there will be the largest increase in 14-59
years
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. First of all, in 2000, 15-59
years
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 in Italy acquired the largest percentage with 61.6%, which was over 4 times that of 0-14%,
while
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 60+
years
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 24.1%. Notably, in Yemen, the proportion of 0-14
years
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 was over half,
whereas
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 60+
years
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 was the lowest item at only 3.6%.
In addition
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, the data demonstrates that 60+
years
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 will increase dramatically in 2050 with 42.3%, but in
Yeman
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, merely will rise by 2.1%.
On the contrary
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, 0-14
years
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 in
Yeman
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 is going to decline by approximately 13% in 2050,
while
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 the figure of 15-59 will decrease by 15% in Italy.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yeman, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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