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People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why this problem occurs? What are the best ways to reduce this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, many
people
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 decide to spend a period of their
time
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 outside the
country
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, to live, work, or try a new
experience
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. It is not always an easy decision, and it is common to feel homesickness.
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 feeling is normal, especially if you are living in another environment, outside your comfort zone.
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, everyone can avoid
this
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 problem with
time
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, re-building a completely new life, from friendships to habits. An
experience
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 outside the own
country
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 is usually useful, for learning another language, exploring other countries, and learning something new. Despite
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, especially at the beginning, it is common to feel lost. Body and mind are attached to a specific environment, a specific city or town, to our friends and family. Without these safe reference points, we do not know what do to, or how to manage our lives.
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, nothing is lost.
People
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 should resist for a
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 before they give up
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 because there are solutions to homesickness. We need
time
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 to discover the new
country
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 – the new office, the new university, and the new city – and to get used to a different culture. After that, we should start to build new solid relationships, that are extremely important to re-create a “family abroad”, a “safe place”.
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, a solution can be to keep your agenda full. The more
experience
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 you have, the more places you visit, and the better you will feel. To highlight how homesickness is usually irrelevant I can use recent research, from the University of Boston. They show that just one person to five, if he could go back, would not have the
experience
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 of living in another
country
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 again,
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 homelessness.
To sum up
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, today some
people
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 decide to move to another
country
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, but sometimes they miss their home, their family, and their culture. It is completely normal in the first period, but with
time
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, patience and will,
people
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 get used to the new environment and, in the end, they call it a “second home”.

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Clarify ideas with more depth and examples. For example, expanding on specific strategies to manage homesickness could strengthen the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases more effectively to improve flow between ideas. This will help enhance coherence.
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Ensure that all parts of your essay support the main thesis. For instance, the mention of research could be integrated more directly into your argument.
structure
The introduction clearly outlines the topic and the common issue of homesickness.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points, reiterating the idea of establishing a 'second home'.

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