A large company In your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, alter to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company, In your letter describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to your survey about sponsorship for a local

children

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's sports

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or paying for two outdoor concerts. In my opinion, sponsoring a local

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's sports

team

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for two years will encourage them to move towards their goals.

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can guarantee their future,

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for our national

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in particular

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, by casting in different matches.

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, paying for two outdoor concerts would be able to bring huge attention to your company in a short period of time. Indeed,

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can bring happiness

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more folks and will help your company to be at the top of the news for several days. I believe helping

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by supporting their local

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more positive aspects both for you and the

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, your company will be seen in different competitions as a sponsor,

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helping

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to take important steps for their future profession. Thanks for your help and support for the society. Yours faithfully Ali Alaei

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Ensure that the letter addresses all parts of the prompt fully, including clear benefits for both options and the reasoning for the recommended choice.

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Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter to match the context of writing to a company.

coherence cohesion

Improve paragraph structuring by dedicating each to a coherent point or argument, avoiding blending multiple ideas that might be better presented separately.

coherence cohesion

Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs smoothly, and provide clear topic sentences to guide the reader.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

168 words

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