Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyles in countries with cold climates. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

In today’s society, the question of where it is better to live, whether in a cold or hot
climate
, has become a topic of debate. Some individuals argue that it is beneficial for them
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in the northern areas of our globe,
while
others hold the opposing view, preferring hot temperatures.
Although
it is believed by some that
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in cold
countries
is better from an economic point of view, I opine that hot
countries
can offer a better quality of life in terms of mind-body health. Supporters of living in cold
countries
argue that they made
this
choice because it allowed them to earn more money than usual and
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a higher standard of living. In fact, administrations of northern nations,
such
as Alaska or Canada, are trying to persuade people to move there in order to work in their big industries (eg. fishing, mining etc.) by offering higher salaries to seasonal workers.
For example
, Netflix is producing some TV series on
this
kind of job,
such
as “Gold
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” or “Extreme
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”. Despite extreme weather conditions, workers are content, because they usually earn three times what they earn on a normal job.
On the other hand
, proponents of considering a lifestyle in hot places think that living there can allow them to stay healthy, because of the sweeter
climate
.
In addition
, people who moved to Africa or South America made that choice
also
because these continents are less expensive than Europe or the US. They can save some money, and be more mentally relaxed at the same time. I know a couple of family friends who moved to Kenya not so long ago. They are happy there because of the quality of life they have been experiencing. The sweeter temperatures help one of them with his lung condition, and
consequently
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he is healthy, more serene and satisfied. In conclusion, the issue of where individuals prefer to live is a complex one.
While
a cold
climate
can offer more job opportunities and a better financial situation, a lifestyle in
countries
with a hot
climate
allows them to be more healthy, relaxed and joyful.
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Ensure that both views on the preference for living in hot or cold climates are discussed equally. Elaborate on specific examples and provide a balanced analysis before concluding with your opinion.
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