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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer companies are leaving their countries for developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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In the
last
 few years,
majority
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 of health, tech and other highly qualified professionals are migrating to countries much richer than their current employers. What could possibly be the reason for
this
 decision?
This
 is the first question that comes to mind when we look at the situation. I am going to discuss the main causes of
this
 problem in forthcoming paragraphs and
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 some main points to give a precise solution. First and foremost, not getting paid as compared to what rich countries are offering is one of the reasons why people choose to move. Even if staff members on both sides have the same experience and skill set. Still, the underdeveloped
companies
 are not able to pay them a good amount
due to
 fewer resources.
Additionally
, there is no guarantee of career growth in
such
companies
.
For instance
, people working in the IT industry have to learn new languages so that they can keep themselves updated with market trends. Organizing workshops and inviting other experienced professionals is a mandatory step in order to keep engaging employees with these trends. Small
companies
however
 are unable to provide
such
 type of facilities to their members. There are many solutions that can tackle these problems smoothly.
Firstly
, it is the key responsibility of the government to provide enough resources to
such
companies
. So that
companies
 can pay a handsome amount of salaries to their members rather than losing them.
Moreover
,
companies
 can collaborate with foreign organizations in order to conduct productive workshops and meetings.
To conclude
, highly skilled professionals are moving to richer countries for better income and broad career options.
Although
,
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this
 problem is increasing with each passing year with enough attention and by taking adequate measures we can overcome
this
 problem easily.
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