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There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: describe what the problem with the changing rooms is say what happened the last times you complained explain what you want the manager to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to tell you about the condition of the changing rooms and I will write the main problems to draw your attention so you can take immediate action.
Firstly
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, Our sports centre has a good reputation in the public. But there is a problem with the AC of the room which is not working and there is
also
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 a smell which indicates the area is not cleaned properly or on a regular day.
Secondly
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, the door of the place is not locked as it becomes old because of longer use.
Moreover
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, I already told the receptionist about the issues to change the condition but I did not see any action or improvement.
Therefore
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, I request you please hire more workers to clean the room regularly
as well as
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 fix the lock of the door. I hope immediate action should be taken to make our sports centre more popular. Yours Faithfully, Love

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and that ideas flow logically from one to the other, utilizing transitional phrases where necessary.
coherence cohesion
When writing a formal letter, maintain consistent formal language throughout, and ensure that the opening and closing are appropriately formal in tone.
task achievement
Expand on each point, offering specific details or examples where possible to fully address all parts of the task prompt.
task achievement
Consider using more varied sentence structure to add complexity and better showcase language abilities.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequent user
  • specific issues
  • cleanliness
  • hygiene
  • broken facilities
  • lack of supplies
  • address the issue
  • response
  • emphasize
  • well-maintained
  • comfort
  • hygiene
  • politely
  • firmly
  • request
  • resolve
  • prompt resolution
  • discuss
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