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The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect based products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.

The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect based products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.
#show #information #willingness #insect #products #price #food #market #place
This
maps
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 elaborates
which
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 region in the global who
likely
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is likely
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 to eat
insect based
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insect-based
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product
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products
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 and its price
on
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in
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 the supermarket. The highest percentage of area with
insect
 eater is
colored
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 with green
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with
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 yellow and red gradient examines the lower number. The thing that pops up the most is
mexico
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Mexico
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 where 71% of its
citizen
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citizens
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 will likely consume
insext
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it
 where it is the topmost number in there.
Additionally
, Peru is charting in the second place highest with 58%
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followed by Thailand with
2
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% difference, which is 56%.
On the other hand
,
Japanesse
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Japan
 tends not to eat
insect based
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insect-based
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product
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products
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 with approximately threefold
of
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divergence
with
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from
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 Mexico which only has 21%
popoulation
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population
 consume it. More than that, South Africa, Spain, and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom share pretty much the same number with
estimately
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estimated
estimate
estimates
 less than 40% of
public
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the public
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 likely to eat the
product
. There are
also
same
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states like Brazil and China that show 44% and 45%
of
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interest
on
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in
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the
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insect
product
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products
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.
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