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In some countries , the government promote public transportation and discourage the private vehicles what are the advantage and disadvantages?

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It is considered by several countries
that
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their governments encourage people to use public
transportation
 methods like trams and subways rather than their own cars . Using transported public ways reflects benefits to the environment and social perspectives, but there are some drawbacks. One evident benefit to using transported public methods is that it will assist in decreasing the environmental problems like air pollution .
In other words
, the gas emissions from private cars affect the environment harmfully in comparison to other
transportation
 ways. Another reason is that the high usage by humans in public
transportation
,
such
 as trams and underground railway systems will impact positively
in
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the rate of accidents which the rate will be lower substantially.
In addition
, it will lower the congestion and the traffic
jam
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 in the streets gradually .
On the other hand
,there are obvious disadvantages to using public
transportation
.
Firstly
,
the
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public
transportation
 serves tickets with high unaffordable prices.
This
 will discourage people
to use
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 them.
Secondly
, it serves short and small routes which can make travellers dissatisfied
that
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 will lead them to use their private vehicles
instead
.
For instance
 , there are some subways
do
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 not offer specific destinations which are near to prominent figures like universities and governmental institutes. In conclusion,
while
 there are plus points to using public
transportation
 methods, there are disadvantages as well. Governments and local organizations should lower the prices and extend the routes including remarkable places in their towns which will increase people's satisfaction in using them over their own vehicles.
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