The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process of producing
sugar
from its origin, sugar
cane, is illustrated below.
Overall
, it is clear that
manufacturing sugar
consists of 7 steps in which sugar
cane is harvested after growing for around a year, and then
, by turning into
Correct pronoun usage
it into
juice
and cooling down, finally
sugar
is created.
To begin
with, sugar
canes grow taking up to a year and a half. In the second stage, sugar
canes are harvested either by farmers or giant machines. Thereafter
, they are put in a whirling apparentus
which crushes down Correct your spelling
apparatus
apparent
sugar
canes and liquifies it, generating juice
from it.
The fourth step includes purifying the juice
by using a specific device called Limestone
filter. Correct article usage
a Limestone
Next,
the juice
is heated in an evaporator in order to turn into syrup, so that when the syrup is centrifuged subsequently
sugar
crystals will be separated and distict
. Correct your spelling
disticted
Finally
, in the last
section, the mixture is dried and cooled, thereby forming sugar
, as it is.Submitted by shery.1375.sh on
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