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The chart below gives information on the aveneye cost. of a monthly plan from four defferent mabile phone providers in a European country. between January and September 2012, measured in eours.

The chart below gives information on the aveneye cost. of a monthly plan from four defferent mabile phone providers in a European country. between January and September 2012, measured in eours.
The graph below demonstrates facts on the range price of monthly programmes from 4 different smartphone suppliers in a European country. snice January until september2012, measured in
euros
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Overall
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, The range price of Alpha supplier increased significantly.
Also
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, there was a normal increase in the costs of Demo and Lex.
While
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 the fourth one the Sim Tx gives a decline statue. Alpha giver started the period with only 5
euros
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 and continued with the price until June with only a slight rise between them, and
began
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began to
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 increase gradually in the next month and kept like
this
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 to be
finally
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in
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at
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 the end of the period with an average of 25
euros
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.Unlike that, Sim Tx began the period with almost 9 and continued in a steady way to reach nearly 15
euros
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 in the median , following a dramatic reduction to finish with a median
down10
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down 10
euros
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.
Moreover
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, the rest two where steady and
similar
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had similar
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 results with slight differences , Lex appeared with almost 12
euros
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 and Kept on with steady moves and small up-down changes until finished with over 16
euros
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 in the median ,
while
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 Demo showed up at 15 and get increased in dramatically way to reach 20 in May and kept like
this
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 up to 2 months and increased again to be 25 in July but
this
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 changed
immediatly
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immediately
 to get dropped in slight amount .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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