The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in

the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and

reporting the main features and make comparisons where

relevant.
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The two pie charts provide information about the four types of retail sectors in Canada
have
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that have
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been sold via online transactions from 2005 to 2010, calculated in percentage.
Overall
, it is evident that every category has experienced
an
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minor changes over 5 years. Looking at the details, video games, which had the smallest portion in 2005 with 18%, increased
5
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by 5
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% and reached third place of all sectors outperforming home furnishings by 8% in 2010.
However
, from having
one fourth
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one-fourth
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of the chart, home decoration's percentage had decreased 10% in the next 5 years.
Furthermore
, in the year 2010, electronic machines lost
position
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their position
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for the highest number of online sales to food and beverage with merely 2% because culinary had
growth
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grown
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10% and electronic equipment had declined 5%, becoming 32% and 30%, respectively.
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