The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian Countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian Countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
percentage
of the population in
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the Philppines
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Philppines
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Philippines
,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
, and
Indonesia
from 1970 to 2020. It
also
provides
the
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apply
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predictions
in
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for
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the
year
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years
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2030 and 2040.
Overall
, from 1970 to 2020, the
percentage
of
the
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people living in rural areas in
Malaysia
,
Indonesia
, and
Thailand
increased
while
Philippines
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the Philippines
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witnessed
fluctuated
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.
However
, it
estimated
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that these four
cities
will have increased significantly in 2030 and 2040. As a graph shows, the
percentage
of
the
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people living in rural areas in
Malaysia
and
Indonesia
witnessed a significant
increasing
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increase
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from 1970 to 2020. In
Malaysia
, it was accounted
an
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for an
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increasing
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increase
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from 30% to about 75%.
Moreover
, in
Indonesia
, it increased from around 12% to nearly 50%.
In addition
, the rates of population living in
cities
in
Thailand
experienced a gradual
increasing
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increase
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from nearly 20% in 1970 to around 30% in 2020.
In contrast
, the
percentage
of people living in
cities
in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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witnessed some
fluctuatuions
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fluctuations
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from about 31% in 1970 and
then
increased rapidly to about 49% in 1990 before it declined gradually to 40% in 2020.
However
, it accounted that
in
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Malaysia
,
Indonesia
,
Thailand
, and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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will have
increased
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an increased
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of
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apply
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percentage
of population living in
cities
in 2030 and 2040, from 80% to about 82%, 60% to around 62%, about 35% to around 45%, and nearly 50% to about 52%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, malaysia, thailand, indonesia, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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