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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian Countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian Countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of the population in
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the Philppines
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Philppines
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Philippines
,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and
Indonesia
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 from 1970 to 2020. It
also
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 provides
the
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predictions
in
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for
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 the
year
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years
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 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, from 1970 to 2020, the
percentage
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 of
the
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people living in rural areas in
Malaysia
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,
Indonesia
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, and
Thailand
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 increased
while
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 witnessed
fluctuated
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.
However
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, it
estimated
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 that these four
cities
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 will have increased significantly in 2030 and 2040. As a graph shows, the
percentage
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 of
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people living in rural areas in
Malaysia
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 and
Indonesia
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 witnessed a significant
increasing
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increase
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 from 1970 to 2020. In
Malaysia
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, it was accounted
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for an
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increasing
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 from 30% to about 75%.
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, in
Indonesia
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, it increased from around 12% to nearly 50%.
In addition
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, the rates of population living in
cities
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 in
Thailand
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 experienced a gradual
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 from nearly 20% in 1970 to around 30% in 2020.
In contrast
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, the
percentage
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 of people living in
cities
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 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 witnessed some
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 from about 31% in 1970 and
then
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 increased rapidly to about 49% in 1990 before it declined gradually to 40% in 2020.
However
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, it accounted that
in
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Malaysia
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,
Indonesia
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,
Thailand
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, and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 will have
increased
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an increased
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of
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percentage
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 of population living in
cities
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 in 2030 and 2040, from 80% to about 82%, 60% to around 62%, about 35% to around 45%, and nearly 50% to about 52%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, malaysia, thailand, indonesia, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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