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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 students after their educational years in universities should stay in that country and work in the related measure for a specific period of time.
On the other hand
, there are people who believe that they should have open options in
this
 case. In my view,
This
 can matter when we study in governmental universities and receive a free
education
. In
this
 essay, I will examine both views and introduce my standpoint.
Firstly
, some individuals widely accepted that if they have a chance to study in a highly ranked governmental university for free, they should pay off the energy or resources that are allocated to them. But if they have paid their funds during that period, in my view, it doesn't make sense to be forced to stay in that country and work for years as there is nothing that should be compensated.
For instance
, I'm a graduate student of one of the best governmental academies,
consequently
 in order to set my degree free, I had to work for 3 years in that place. Having said that, individuals need to have various alternatives for their life plans after their graduation and they should not be forced to stay and have a job where they took their degree. To build upon my point a little more, lots of students have plans to study abroad for
further
education
 and if they have to stay in their country, there will be some pauses in their educational time which are not favourable and somehow it can be distractive.
However
, in many locations, people can set their lower degrees free by paying some amount of money. By the way of example, some friends of mine have selected
this
 method and started their higher
education
 without any break times. In my view, the matter is the case when you studied in universities that you did not pay for receiving an
education
 and it should be compensated. But in other options, people should be free to decide for their life, especially their
education
 or professions.
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Ensure that you present a clear thesis statement in your introduction, outlining the discussion points you plan to explore.
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Try to achieve a balanced discussion by equally developing both sides of the argument before providing your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
Make certain to convey your ideas in a logically sequenced manner. Use cohesive devices effectively to connect your ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Avoid excessive repetition of ideas and attempt to showcase a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures.
coherence cohesion
In your conclusion, succinctly summarize the main points discussed in the essay and restate your own opinion clearly and decisively.
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Provide specific examples to support your arguments. These examples should be detailed, relevant, and enhance your response.
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Your essay should comprehensively address all parts of the task. Make sure you discuss both views and give your own opinion, supporting it with relevant examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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