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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the graph describes the amount of the population
in
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the
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apply
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age
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aged
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of
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65 and over. The comparison from the past 1940 and predicted in 2040 by three
differents
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different
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nation
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nations
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 from all around the world.
Overall
, from the information that
given
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was given
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 by the data.
Proportion
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The proportion
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 of the population
been
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has been
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 increased. USA and Sweden
wre
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were
are
 higher than
Japan
 when
it
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they
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 started to
comparing
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compare
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.
Hoever
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However
,
in
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 time which is
predicting
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predicted to
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 be highest on top of
point
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the point
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.
Which
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This
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 means living more
healthy
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once developing
of
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the
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apply
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technology
addition
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addiction
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. Starting with Sweden, starting at 8 % of the
eldey
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elderly
elder
 people in 1940 and rising up every 20
yaers
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years
.
While
 it
is fluctuated
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fluctuates
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 between 1980 to 2020, but still
rise
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rose
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 to 25% in 2040. USA
also
 stood at 9% when started and clime up between 1960 to 1980, but was stood at
same
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the same
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positon
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position
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 and dropped from1980to 2020 and
rise
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rose
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 to 23% in 2040
by
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as
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 predicted.
On the other hand
,
Japan
 was
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the ony
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ony
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only
one
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apply
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nation that dropped from started
adn
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and
 still can not level up in 30 years. Since 1980
Japan
was
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has
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 slightly rise up adn
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 time was
on
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at
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 the top of
point
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the point
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. which
mean
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means
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 more healthier people are living in
Japan
 than
other
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in other
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tow
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two
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 countries.
Submitted by Chaiyapat Soka on

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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