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The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in scotland for 20 years ago and last year

The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in scotland for 20 years ago and last year
#show #amount #electricity #energy #source #scotland #years #year
The provided charts represent the amount of
electricity
 in Scotland based on several
energy
sources
 20 years ago compared to
the
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last
 year. Based on the data, there are seven types of
energy
sources
, namely
hydro pumped
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hydropumped
 storage,
gas
, nuclear, coal, oil,
hydro natural
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hydronatural
 flow, and other types of renewable
energy
. Two decades ago, coal was the main
energy
 source for
electricity
 in Scotland, where it was being used by 41.4%, followed by
gas
 at 22.3%, and nuclear at 19,6%. Oil was the least
preference
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preferred
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 for generating
electricity
 where it
only
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 used by 2,1%.
The
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Last
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last
 year's data showed that coal was still maintaining its position as the primary source of
the
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energy
 for
electricity
 even though it
was
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 decreased to 32.7%.
Gas
 was the second largest source of
energy
 where it had a slight decrease to 21.7%. The same trend happened to the usage of
hydro natural
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hydronatural
 flow.
However
, the usage of oil, nuclear, and other renewable
energy
 rose steadily in
last
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the last
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 year. It can be concluded that the same trend happened to the usage of each
energy
sources
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source
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 for generating
electricity
 in Scotland where the primary
energy
sources
was
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were
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 coal,
gas
, and nuclear.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, energy, sources, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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