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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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In all the
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 categories, learning the local language, finding somewhere to live and making friends is challenging. The following paragraph will give you more information about the comparison between all
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 to perform these challenges.
Comparitively
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Comparatively
, learning the local language is the most challenging for a person over the
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 of 55 years.
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,
a
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person who's just over 18 but under 34
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 25%
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harder
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 to learn the local language. Finding somewhere to live is approximately the same for
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 between 18-34 and 35-54 with a percentage difference of 1%. An average
indivisual
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individual
 over the
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 of 55 will find it much easier to make new friends than a young adult from
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 18-34.
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, most situations have
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 average percentage of challenges for
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 18-34 and 35-54.
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,
this
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 graph mainly highlights the major problems faced
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by
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 different
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 groups( mainly for younger and older
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) when moving to a new country or place.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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