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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table shows the consumer expenditure on various items across five different
countries
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 in 2002.
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, the consumer spent the most on food, drinks, and tobacco, and the least on leisure and education. The food, drinks, and tobacco
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category
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 accounted for the highest proportion of expenditure of consumer spending in all five
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. Turkey and Ireland people were the biggest spenders in
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category
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, at about 32.14% and 28.91 respectively. The corresponding numbers from other
countries
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 were Italy (16.36), Spain (18.8%), and Sweden (15.77%) Consumers who had the greatest spending on clothing and footwear came from Italy with 9%. Expenditure in
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category
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 for the other four
countries
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 ranged from 5.40% to 6.63%. Regarding leisure and education,
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 expense
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 received the smallest share among the other types. Even in Turkey where the spending was the greatest, the figure was only 4.35%. Spain was the lowest-spending country in
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, at about 1.98%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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