The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries

▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about the difficulties that
peole
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people
face
when they go to live overseas.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
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people
with
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the
age
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of 18
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experience the highest challenges compared to the other ages. Looking in more
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detail
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, almost 30% of
people
with
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the
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age
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from
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18
until
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34
seems
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to
face
a problem
of
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learning the local language. The older society with the
age
of 35-54 has 35% of
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the percentage
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who
get
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difficulty
to study
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a new
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language
.
Also
, more than 50% of older
people
with
age
more than 50
face
the same problem.
People
who are more than 55 years old could find somewhere to live
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compared to
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those
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orther
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other
ages.
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, young
people
tend to find it difficult to make friends. It shows from the graph that 46%
face
a problem
to make
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new friends.
On the other hand
,
people
with the
age
of 35-54 and more than 55 have lower percentages, they are 36% and 23%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words face, people, age with synonyms.
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