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The graph and chart give information on the aveage daily maximum and minimum temperature in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities

The graph and chart give information on the aveage daily maximum and minimum temperature in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities
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The provided line diagram compares the average highest and lowest temperatures in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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,
whereas
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 the bar chart illustrates the average rainy
days
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 in similar cities. In general,
Brisbane
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 is much warmer than
Canberra
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,
although
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 the number of rainfall
days
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 is not extremely different from January to December. Examining the details, in January,
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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 started the temperature at about 26, but the following month, it jumped to 30. Meanwhile,
Canberra
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 stuck in the same number and constantly plunged and reached under 15 until August. The temperature in
Brisbane
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also
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 dropped below 25 until September and slightly rose around 30 from around September to December similar to
Canberra
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. Moving to the next data, it shows that
Brisbane
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 had more frequent rainfall
days
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 than
Canberra
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, particularly during February and March, since it was exactly 14
days
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, becoming the longest duration in a year.
On the contrary
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,
Canberra
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 from June to August was more rainy
due to
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 10-day rainfall sessions. At the same time, it caused
Canberra
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 much cooler and achieved almost 0 during these three months, whilst
Brisbane
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 was merely at 10 in July and August.
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