You are planning to take a vacation. Writing a letter to a friend. In your letter: describe the vacation spot you have chosen explain how you plan to spend your time there invite your friend to join you on your vacation

Hi Nilu, Hope you are doing well. After finishing the busy
christmas
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season, I got a chance to apply for a vacation from my restaurant. I have already applied holiday for
the
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next month. As we discussed
last
time, I chose the Zeppo
hotel
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in Clyde. The place is
such
a beautiful and
a
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calm place to enjoy our whole vacation. My
girl friend
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and I have
planed
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so many activities to enjoy our vacation period. Mainly we have to collect all the items for the games like cycling, cricket and football. I hope you
also
can bring some items
such
as a ball and a cricket bat. If you can bring those items it would be great. I am
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to visit some places around Clyde. I hope you will join with us too. Because I have booked the place for everyone including you and your girlfriend. As I remember,
last
time we had a good time, the reason is you. when you come with your girlfriend you can introduce her as well. I am waiting for a reply letter from you soon. Write back soon. Take care. With love, Lahiru
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
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Coherence and Cohesion
Effective use of paragraphs to separate different topics.
Task Achievement
The tone is appropriately casual and friendly for a letter to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking scenery
  • cultural landmarks
  • itinerary
  • accommodations
  • excursions
  • gastronomic delights
  • leisure activities
  • unwind and relax
  • off the beaten track
  • once-in-a-lifetime experience
  • picturesque
  • explore
  • local cuisine
  • adventure
  • bonding
  • create memories
  • companionship
  • escapade
  • serenity
  • revitalize
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