It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo…) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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from day to day have an impact

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, especially animals. unfortunately, preventing the

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millions of years ago. I totally agree, in

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, the most widely accepted scientific explanation is

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catastropic

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event. likely a large asteroid impact,

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to the mass extinction

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period.

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consequences, leading to significant

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environmental

changes that affected many species, including the dinosaurs.

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, in the present day, the main focus is on understanding and mitigating factors that could lead to the extinction of current species, including humans.

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, conservation efforts, environmental awareness, and responsible resource management play crucial roles in preserving biodiversity and preventing

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extinctions

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thus

, our next generation can see and learn.

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Your essay lacks a clear introduction and doesn't adequately address the task prompt. It is essential to have a clear thesis statement stating your position and main arguments. Your conclusion should summarize these points succinctly.

coherence cohesion

The essay requires a coherent logical structure, with a proper introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and subsequent sentences should support that idea. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs should be smooth and logical.

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Support your main points with relevant examples and details. Avoid generalizations and ensure that the examples are directly linked to the argument you are making.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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3 paragraphs

143 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

extinction
evolution
biodiversity
ecosystem
habitat destruction
climate change
conservation
irreversible
ecological balance
species preservation
environmental ethics
sustainability
endangered species
natural selection
ecosystem services
wildlife protection
moral obligation
human intervention

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