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1) The diagrams above give information on transport and vehicle consume in Edmonton.

1) The diagrams above give information on transport and vehicle consume in Edmonton.
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The circular chart
Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
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provide
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provides
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 data
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on
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of
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on
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 transport and cars used in Edmonton and the table
also
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 illustrates humans' reasons
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for
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of
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for
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 driving in that town
too
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apply
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. In overview, the largest population preferred motors and trams,
while
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 others consumed taxis and buses.
Additionally
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, human beings use their vehicles to go to work, shopping, school and for business occasions.
To begin
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 with, about 45% of people afford to use a car followed by light rail transit with a maximum percentage of thirty-five.
Furthermore
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, both
taxi
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taxis
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 and autobus have the same number of 10 per cent and
this
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 is the
leasts
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least
ones
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one
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 all over the rest.
Moreover
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, many people
commutes
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commute
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 to graft using private vehicles with the highest per cent of 55 and those in
business
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the business
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 sector
accommodates
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accommodate
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 45% of patrolling in the city
as well as
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adolescent
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an adolescent
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also
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 uses
motor
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a motor
the motor
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 to travel for educational purposes and
this
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 takes almost 40% of the sector.
Lastly
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, motor
vehicle
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vehicles
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 used in time of leisure activities
as well as
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 shopping with a percentage of 15 respectively.
Hence
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,
this
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 clearly
explain
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explains
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 that the society frequently
using
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uses
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 motors in Edmonton only for profitable issues.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, as well as".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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