The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.

The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.
The table provides information about the temperatures and
hours
of daylight in
London
and
Sydney
on the 28th, 29th, and 30th of December 2018.
Overall
, the temperature in
Sydney
is significantly higher than in
London
. The weather in
Sydney
is consistently getting warmer each
day
. The hottest
day
in
Sydney
occurred on Sunday the 30th as it reached 31 degrees Celsius.
On the other hand
,
London
's weather fluctuates with no clear pattern.
For example
, on Saturday the 29th,
London
reached its highest temperature out of the three days observed at 13 degrees Celsius.
However
, that same date is
also
the
day
when it reached its lowest temperature, at the level of 3 degrees Celsius. The
hours
of sunrise in
London
were approximately 2
hours
and 15 minutes later than in
Sydney
. On most days during December 2018, the sun rose in
London
around 08.06
while
Sydney
residents experienced the sunrise much earlier at about 05.45.
On the contrary
, the
day
ended in
London
nearly 4
hours
ahead of
Sydney
; The sunset occurred at around 15.58 in
London
while
the same happened in
Sydney
at 20.07. As we can see based on the data,
London
had relatively shorter days than
Sydney
in December 2018
as a result
of
London
's late sunrise and early sunset.
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