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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide data about local government
expenditure
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 in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, both in 2010 and 2015 education had the highest
expenditure
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rate
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. As can clearly be seen, in 2010 education had the highest
expenditure
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rate
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 with 24 per
cent
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. The rates of expenditures on healthcare, pensions and defence were pretty similar
with
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 21 per
cent
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, 19 per
cent
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 and 17 per
cent
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 respectively. In 2010 the least amount of money was spent on
other
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others
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 accounting for 1 per
cent
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. In 2015, education had the highest
expenditure
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rate
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 with 21 per
cent
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. The
rate
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 of
expenditure
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 on healthcare was 20 per
cent
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,
whereas
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 pensions had 19 per
cent
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. The percentages of
expenditure
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 on defence, interest on borrowing and welfare were pretty similar with 14 per
cent
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, 10 per
cent
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 and 13 per
cent
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 respectively. In 2015 the rates of expenditures on transport, culture and leisure and
other
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others
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 was the same accounting for 1 per
cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, rate, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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