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The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years.

The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years.
The given bar
chart
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 illustrates the typical
rainfall
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 during the
last
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year
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 per month and the line
chart
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 provides information on a 40-
year
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trend
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 of the
rainfall
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 in those months. Looking at the
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that the
rainfall
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 for the first month reached a peak
and
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in Aug and Sep dropped to a low. In terms of
trend
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, the rain volume decreased sharply from its peak in Jan to Apr and May and
then
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 went down slightly to its low in Aug and Sep, before rising over
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last
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the last
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 three months of the
year
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.
According to
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 the bar
chart
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, Jan accounted for the highest amount of
rainfall
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 at 70
mm
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, followed by Feb and Mar at just below 60
mm
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 and 60
mm
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 respectively. Except for May when its rain volume (40
mm
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)
in
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last
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year
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 outnumbered the general
trend
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 valued at 30
mm
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, and neither of the months from Apr to Oct experienced a value higher than 30
mm
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.
Also
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, the figures indicate that the
rainfall
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 went up sharply from 10
mm
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 in Sep to 60mm in the
last
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 month. In terms of compatibility of the bar
chart
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 and line
chart
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, the general
trend
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 can be seen in the
last
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year
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 except for Mar, May and June.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, rainfall, year, trend, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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