The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years.

The bar chart below shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for last year. The line shows the average rainfall for Australia by month for the last 40 years.
The given bar
chart
illustrates the typical
rainfall
during the
last
year
per month and the line
chart
provides information on a 40-
year
trend
of the
rainfall
in those months. Looking at the
overall
perspective, it is apparent that the
rainfall
for the first month reached a peak
and
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in Aug and Sep dropped to a low. In terms of
trend
, the rain volume decreased sharply from its peak in Jan to Apr and May and
then
went down slightly to its low in Aug and Sep, before rising over
last
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three months of the
year
.
According to
the bar
chart
, Jan accounted for the highest amount of
rainfall
at 70
mm
, followed by Feb and Mar at just below 60
mm
and 60
mm
respectively. Except for May when its rain volume (40
mm
)
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last
year
outnumbered the general
trend
valued at 30
mm
, and neither of the months from Apr to Oct experienced a value higher than 30
mm
.
Also
, the figures indicate that the
rainfall
went up sharply from 10
mm
in Sep to 60mm in the
last
month. In terms of compatibility of the bar
chart
and line
chart
, the general
trend
can be seen in the
last
year
except for Mar, May and June.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, rainfall, year, trend, mm with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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