Some people think that marketing and advertising is useless because people buy their products from some shops which have good quality of services and products. Do you agree or disagree?

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Mostly, people tend to buy items

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the good promotion. Since the market is getting smart, they prefer to spend their money depending on the quality of services and supplies offered. I strongly agree with the importance of better hospitality and supplies beyond the marketing strategy. Experiencing the high value of items and services

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generates loyalty and satisfaction in the industry. Marketing can actually come from the commerce themselves. Once, they go to the shop with a nice treatment from the seller, can be a plus point of that shop in their mind.

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, I experienced buying a bag in a store namely A, the saleswoman was smiling at me and asked for my references. The first thing which came to my top of mind was the heartwarming ambience there.

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, she gave me three to five choices of bags and gave me time to try them all until I got my favourite. It made me very happy because I was able to pick up my best bag freely without any pressure feeling.

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, I had bought another bag in another store, which the saleswoman was not very welcome. The first time she did not treat me well, I cancelled to enter the shop.

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, now I always decide to buy bags from store A.

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, marketing is actually about reaching the sales target.

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many tricky marketing strategies without providing a high value of items, sometimes generates a low trust. Different from

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, without any promotion, buyers will tend to be satisfied when they buy their goods which function very well.

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, I have bought a famous hair dryer at an affordable price. In just 2 months it was broken, and could not be repaired. The next time, I bought it again but started by reading the reviews from another market. The good reviews convinced me to buy it, and fortunately, it really functions very well and now, I assume that other goods from that brand are all good. In conclusion, marketing can be created by the market. It is not all about a strategic marketing implementation but how to generate good experiences of buyers, through services and highly valued products.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure consistent terminology. For instance, the essay uses both 'commerce' and 'market' which might confuse readers.

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Clarify the distinction between the two examples of shopping experience by using clearer transitions.

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Refine sentence constructions for better clarity, such as 'The next time, I bought it again but started by reading the reviews from another market.'

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The essay provides relevant and specific examples to illustrate points, enhancing reader engagement.

coherence cohesion

There is a clear introduction and conclusion, giving the essay a complete structure.

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The argument in favor of product quality over marketing is consistently developed throughout the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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369 words

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Some people think that marketing and advertising is useless because people buy their products from some shops which have good quality of services and products. Do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The best way to solve environmental problems is increase the fuel cost? do you agree or disagree?

The tourist industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it's a positive or negative development?

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?