Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In modern days, we are presented with abundant choices of medicines and
health
measures, which can potentially shift a conventional doctor visit. In
this
essay, I will discuss how
this
is not a positive change, which is followed by the reasons behind
this
statement.
Firstly
, the internet often leads society to adapt to certain trends with no thorough credibility-checking to avoid the potential damages caused.
For instance
, during the peak COVID-19 outbreak in Indonesia, social media influences caused a great number of citizens to buy a UV light machine, which claimed to kill the viruses in the air.
Consequently
, those people used the machine to obtain security from the infectious virus, which led to a massive skyrocketing infected cases of COVID-19.
Moreover
, the lack of trustful sources of information and awareness to debunk them are the culprits of self-treatment failures.
Secondly
, even after rapid developments of AI technologies and telemedicine, educated
health
workers are still very needed to handle the patients as
health
rehabilitation is not about knowledge and theory but
also
needs a touch of empathy and instinct from human practitioners.
For example
, research found that patients who are treated by human doctors have the tendency to feel more content compared to those who are handled by robots.
As a result
, the former show significant
health
improvements and are allegedly caused by social fulfilment from human interactions.
Hence
, human professionals are still irreplaceable by AI and technologies. In conclusion, the widespread misleading information in the media and the irreplaceable humane quality which robots can not replicate
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evidence of why doctors' appointments are still the superior choice for current
health
rehabilitation.
Nonetheless
, future technologies and research may be able to surpass
this
method and bring a much better solution for the world's wellness quality.
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Ensure your essay has a clear overview with distinct introduction and conclusion paragraphs. Each paragraph should commence with a topic sentence that is expanded upon throughout the paragraph. Finish your essay with a comprehensive conclusion restating your key points and your opinion.
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To score higher in task achievement, directly respond to the prompt by stating if you believe the development is positive or negative, substantiated by relevant examples and reasons. Your opinion should be clear throughout, and the conclusion must reiterate your position with a summary of the main arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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