It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages?

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Taking

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a significant role in

people

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’s both professional and private lives.

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this

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approach can lead

people

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to harmful consequences, it can

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bring them success. Taking some

risks

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leads

people

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to step out of their comfort zone.

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, they will be able to seize new opportunities and chances which may be lost/missed normally.

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, emigration is a risky decision as

people

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have no clear outlook on it, but when they emigrate, they will find a variety of jobs which were not

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in their country because of economic problems or since their payments were not fair.

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, even if they cannot succeed, they will Learn from setbacks/ failures. Actually,

this

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new wealth of experience will lead them to success in their

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decisions. I believe that being sad for doing something wrong is better than being sad for doing nothing.

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, taking

risks

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have

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has several drawbacks for

people

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such

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as putting their personal health in danger. Facing new occasions in life,

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which

people

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have no control, can cause high levels of stress and anxiety.

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, in my opinion, life is always full of pressure whether

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take

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or not.

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moreover

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, taking

risks

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and unsuccessful efforts waste

people

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’s time and resources,

such

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as risky financial decisions which may

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to significant financial losses.

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, there are several pros and cons

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taking

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. In some

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the

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cases, it can

cause

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wase

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waste

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one’s time, energy and

recourses

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, but it

worth

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it as it gives

people

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new opportunities, even if

people

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are forced to tolerate high levels of stress.

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task achievement

The essay addresses the prompt but needs to be developed further to provide a more nuanced discussion. Address the balance of advantages and disadvantages and offer insights in the conclusion to more accurately reflect on whether risks are worth taking.

coherence cohesion

While the essay has a logical structure, there are several grammatical errors and inappropriate word choices that hinder clarity. Focus on improving the accuracy of language and maintaining coherence throughout.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

273 words

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Your opinion

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