The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
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The map shows a comparison between the present condition of the industrial area in Norbiton with the future situation after the development of the site.
According to
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the data, the changes that will be made after the redevelopment are extravagant in the three areas.
Firstly
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, on the east side, various factories will be revamped into houses, schools, medical centres, and playgrounds.
Secondly
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, on the west, the industrial site will be transformed into a housing field.
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, the centre of it will be turned into a boulevard that connects all areas within the site.
On the other hand
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, minimalistic changes will be made in two other areas. The north side of it will have a connected road on top of the river, easily connecting the people with farmland.
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, in the south, there will be no huge changes made, just the emergence of boulevards that
leads
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lead
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to big roads.
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, future modification is looking promising with the existence of various public facilities and greater access to basic necessities.
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