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you have been offered a job overseas that you applied for. Write a letter to your friend who is already knows about that job as well. .Tell what kind of job it is .explain why you applied for this job .ask your friend about the country

#job #friend #country
Dear Pappey, I hope
this
 letter finds you. I'm writing to you to tell you that I have been offered a job in Australia. Let me give you some details about the job I've got. My position will be project manager at the site. I'll have a car and two supervisors with me
while
 I work there.
Firstly
, I'll need to do surveying of materials which are used at the construction.
Secondly
, one of my duties is checking staff who work regularly with us at the office.
Also
, I'll organise meetings with stakeholders when the meetings are necessary for work. You know why I applied
this
 job for, right? It's always good to gain new experiences and see new cultures. After all 5 years
experience
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 in Soma, I said that it's time to explore new things which are essential for my career. I would like to ask you about how's the culture in Australia and what
are
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the lifestyle looks like. By the way, I'm a drinker as you know and it'd be great if you could explain to me about nightlife as well. How do people treat themselves on the weekend? If there is good nature, I can bring my camping stuff and you can show me around. I can't wait to hear from you, my friend. Best Regards, Atilla
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