you have been offered a job overseas that you applied for. Write a letter to your friend who is already knows about that job as well. .Tell what kind of job it is .explain why you applied for this job .ask your friend about the country

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Dear Pappey, I hope

this

letter finds you. I'm writing to you to tell you that I have been offered a job in Australia. Let me give you some details about the job I've got. My position will be project manager at the site. I'll have a car and two supervisors with me

while

I work there.

Firstly

, I'll need to do surveying of materials which are used at the construction.

Secondly

, one of my duties is checking staff who work regularly with us at the office.

Also

, I'll organise meetings with stakeholders when the meetings are necessary for work. You know why I applied

this

job for, right? It's always good to gain new experiences and see new cultures. After all 5 years

experience

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in Soma, I said that it's time to explore new things which are essential for my career. I would like to ask you about how's the culture in Australia and what

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the lifestyle looks like. By the way, I'm a drinker as you know and it'd be great if you could explain to me about nightlife as well. How do people treat themselves on the weekend? If there is good nature, I can bring my camping stuff and you can show me around. I can't wait to hear from you, my friend. Best Regards, Atilla

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and the supporting sentences are directly related to it.

coherence cohesion

Use a wider range of cohesive devices to link ideas across sentences and paragraphs more smoothly.

task achievement

Expand on each point you make to provide a fuller response to the letter prompts, offering more detailed explanations where possible.

task achievement

The writing tone is mostly suitable, but remain consistent in formality throughout the letter.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

221 words

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