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Topic: Spoken communication is always more powerful than written communication. To what extend do you agree or disagree? #topic

#topic #communication
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controversial
 of spoken and written
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is remains
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till
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today. A lot of
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communication
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 by speaking is more effective than written
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. The two views will be spotted light below.
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spoken
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enormous
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 number of
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 way to communicate because they may not like using emails and messages when they want to contact others so they prefer to see
people
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that's
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 why they use spoken language easily than written.
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, if they want to talk with anyone
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him or make a voice. Despite
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the
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written
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 is more powerful than spoken.
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, they like to use
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 to remember the things that they wrote
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and the words they said
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people
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so, he try to text the words that he want to say.
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Coherence & Cohesion
To improve your coherence and cohesion, focus on organizing your ideas in a clear and logical manner. Start with an introduction that clearly presents your thesis statement or main argument. Each following paragraph should contain one main idea, supported by explanations and examples. Transitions between paragraphs and ideas should be smooth and help the reader to follow your argument. Lastly, conclude your essay by summarizing your main points and restating your position.
Task Achievement
Your task response could be improved by making sure that the question is answered completely and directly. Clearly state your extent of agreement or disagreement and support this consistently throughout your essay. Your ideas should be developed thoroughly, and each should be illustrated with relevant examples. Lastly, ensure that you offer a balanced view by considering both sides of the argument if the question calls for it.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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