The maps show a shopping centre in 1985 and in 2005.

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introduce

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introduced

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shopping

mall

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malls

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in 1982 and in 2012.

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shopping

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the shopping

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centre added new shops and new blocks under their roof. As it is obvious from the data.

Mall

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The mall

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got a new parking lot on the left bottom side and

also

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got on top of

parking

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the parking

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lot

new

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a new

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block to furniture retail.

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, it replaced his old place, which was under the electronic store.

However

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, Happy Valley’s inside was changed

too

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apply

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outside. Lobby area which was

entrance

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the entrance

an entrance

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. It was removed. And from

entrance

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the entrance

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view to

opposite

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the opposite

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. You can see four stores which were in past just three. And there

are

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has

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also

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added

one

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apply

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place on top of

mall

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the mall

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. Which is

electronic

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an electronic

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store.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

117 words

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