The maps show a shopping centre in 1985 and in 2005.

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The 2 maps

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shopping

mall

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in 1982 and in 2012.

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shopping

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the shopping

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centre added new shops and new blocks under their roof. As it is obvious from the data.

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got a new parking lot on the left bottom side and

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got on top of

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lot

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block to furniture retail.

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, it replaced his old place, which was under the electronic store.

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, Happy Valley’s inside was changed

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apply

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outside. Lobby area which was

entrance

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the entrance

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. It was removed. And from

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view to

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. You can see four stores which were in past just three. And there

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also

added

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place on top of

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. Which is

electronic

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an electronic

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store.

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4 paragraphs

117 words

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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The maps show a shopping centre in 1985 and in 2005.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem.What are the causes of this and wha actions can be taken to solve this problem?

There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. Write a letter to a local newspaper. In your letter: - introduce yourself - describe the importance of the park - say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan

Some people think that economic progress is the only way to end poverty while others believe that it is causing damage to the environment and so should be stopped. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.