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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart and table illustrate the survey on
tourists
 who spend their holiday at a certain resort in Australia including sources of origin and their favourable accommodation choices and activities
Overall
, European and American
tourists
 make up most of the vacationers with longer duration at the resort. Asians and Americans prefer luxury staying and sightseeing
while
 others enjoy nature-friendlier accommodations with camping or caravan and water sports, In the pie chart, the number of
travelers
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 from Europe was the highest at 37%, followed by the US at 35%.
While
 the total of visitors from these countries accounted for over half, the opposite was observed in Asia, with only 10%, and
other
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in other
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 regions with 18%. In the table, Asian
tourists
 had a medium length of stay of 7
days
, with most of them staying in 5-star hotels, and their main activity being sightseeing, similar to American
tourists
.
However
, the average length of the holiday for Americans is 14
days
, which is double that of Asians. The common length of vacation for European
tourists
 is 16
days
, which is 6
days
 more than visitors from other regions. Interestingly, Europeans and visitors from other regions share the same most prevalent accommodation.
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