General Training Writing Task 2 It is sometimes said that people should be encourages to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words
Some youngsters
inspirited
to take in Wrong verb form
are inspired
marriage
before they are 30 when they think it’s the best choice, while
some adults think this
would be the hurt way to choose. Personally, I think I disagree with this
statement, due to
the moment someone Change preposition
because
decide
to lead to the altar is when they are ready without any pressure from other Change the verb form
decides
people
.
Some people
has dreaming
about their romantic story after Wrong verb form
dream
marriage
will
go over their expectations and not do any preparation Correct word choice
and will
about
it. Change preposition
for
For example
, some research said the new generations have a
greatest Change the article
the
marriage
ever. While
the case numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
divorce
and Fix the agreement mistake
divorces
affair
in my country still increasing at the same age Fix the agreement mistake
affairs
like
Change preposition
apply
them
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, I think love looks
not reasonable for someone Verb problem
is
get
Add the particle
to get
marriage
so early. Replace the word
married
Moreover
, the husband and wife must work together and motivate each other to make a comfortable conditions
in Correct the article-noun agreement
comfortable conditions
a comfortable condition
family
.
Add an article
the family
On the other hand
, some adolescents get forced by their parents to wedding with who they don’t know. For instance
, today’s case of early-age marriage
and domestic violence in my country has increasing
significantly. Wrong verb form
increased
This
not
happen only in mine but Add a missing verb
does not
other
countries too, Change preposition
in other
due to
the traditions or the mentality of old people
. Therefore
, I think it is best for marriage
occur
naturally, without any pressure from external parties.
In conclusion, I believe that Add the particle
to occur
people
should be given their time and the
society or anyone not have Correct determiner usage
that
permissions
to influence the couple’s decisions. Age is no Fix the agreement mistake
permission
problems
rather than your commitment, if someone is ready for Fix the agreement mistake
problem
marriage
that means they have
well-prepared for any Verb problem
are
consequence
in the future.Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
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