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Band 4.5

General Training It is sometimes said that people should be encourages to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some youngsters
inspirited
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 to take in
marriage
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 before they are 30 when they think it’s the best choice,
while
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 some adults think
this
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 would be the hurt way to choose. Personally, I think I disagree with
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 statement,
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due to
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because
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 the moment someone
decide
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decides
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 to lead to the altar is when they are ready without any pressure from other
people
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. Some
people
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has dreaming
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dream
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 about their romantic story after
marriage
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will
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and will
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 go over their expectations and not do any preparation
about
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for
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 it.
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, some research said the new generations have
a
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the
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 greatest
marriage
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 ever.
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 the case
numbers
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number
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 of
divorce
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divorces
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 and
affair
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affairs
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 in my country still increasing at the same age
like
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apply
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them
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apply
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.
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, I think love
looks
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is
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 not reasonable for someone
get
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to get
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marriage
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married
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 so early.
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, the husband and wife must work together and motivate each other to make
a comfortable conditions
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comfortable conditions
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 in
family
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the family
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.
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, some adolescents get forced by their parents to wedding with who they don’t know.
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, today’s case of early-age
marriage
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 and domestic violence in my country has
increasing
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 significantly.
This
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not
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does not
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 happen only in mine but
other
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in other
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 countries too,
due to
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 the traditions or the mentality of old
people
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.
Therefore
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, I think it is best for
marriage
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occur
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to occur
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 naturally, without any pressure from external parties. In conclusion, I believe that
people
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 should be given their time and
the
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that
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 society or anyone not have
permissions
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permission
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 to influence the couple’s decisions. Age is no
problems
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problem
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 rather than your commitment, if someone is ready for
marriage
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 that means they
have
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are
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 well-prepared for any
consequence
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consequences
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 in the future.

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introduction conclusion present
The essay lacks a clear introduction that presents the topic and the writer's opinion in a concise manner. Avoid ambiguous language and unclear thesis statements.
supported main points
While the main points are present, they are neither consistently clear nor fully developed. Support your argument with clearer, more specific examples, and explanations.
complete response
You partially address the prompt, but your response needs to be more fully developed and structured to cover all parts of the task. Make sure to directly address the question throughout your essay and ensure that your position is clear to the reader.
clear comprehensive ideas
Your ideas are sometimes general and not clear enough. Work on expressing your thoughts more comprehensively, with more detailed explanations and appropriate supporting evidence.
relevant specific examples
Your essay would benefit from a wider range of specific examples to support your points. Incorporate relevant details to strengthen your argument.
logical structure
Ensure that your essay has a logical flow by organizing it into clear paragraphs with topic sentences, supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence. Use a variety of linking words to improve the connection between ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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