General Training Writing Task 2 It is sometimes said that people should be encourages to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words

Some youngsters
inspirited
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to take in
marriage
before they are 30 when they think it’s the best choice,
while
some adults think
this
would be the hurt way to choose. Personally, I think I disagree with
this
statement,
due to
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because
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the moment someone
decide
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to lead to the altar is when they are ready without any pressure from other
people
. Some
people
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dream
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about their romantic story after
marriage
will
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and will
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go over their expectations and not do any preparation
about
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it.
For example
, some research said the new generations have
a
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greatest
marriage
ever.
While
the case
numbers
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number
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of
divorce
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divorces
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and
affair
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affairs
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in my country still increasing at the same age
like
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them
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apply
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.
However
, I think love
looks
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not reasonable for someone
get
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to get
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marriage
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married
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so early.
Moreover
, the husband and wife must work together and motivate each other to make
a comfortable conditions
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comfortable conditions
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in
family
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the family
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.
On the other hand
, some adolescents get forced by their parents to wedding with who they don’t know.
For instance
, today’s case of early-age
marriage
and domestic violence in my country has
increasing
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significantly.
This
not
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does not
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happen only in mine but
other
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in other
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countries too,
due to
the traditions or the mentality of old
people
.
Therefore
, I think it is best for
marriage
occur
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to occur
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naturally, without any pressure from external parties. In conclusion, I believe that
people
should be given their time and
the
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that
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society or anyone not have
permissions
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permission
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to influence the couple’s decisions. Age is no
problems
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problem
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rather than your commitment, if someone is ready for
marriage
that means they
have
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are
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well-prepared for any
consequence
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consequences
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in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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