Some people say that the best way to improve health is by increasing the number of health facilities.Others,However,say that this woud have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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that the most efficient way to improve

health

is to increase the amount of

health

facilities.

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people

,

on the other hand

, think that

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this

strategy would have close to no effect on

overall

health

and that we should

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prioritize

different measures. In

this

essay,

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will discuss both of these opinions and give my own point of view.  The

people

that

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in increasing the number of hospitals, doctors offices or even dentists might be correct. In their point of view, more of these places would mean that more

people

would be able to get treated in a

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amount of time.

This

would be beneficial as a dentistry office nowadays can be completely booked for more than a month, forcing clients to call at least a few weeks ahead of the moment they want their appointment.

This

results often in

people

forgeting

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forgetting

or giving up on going and staying with their bad tooth for longer than it is recommended.

This

,

overall

, could lead to serious

health

problems

for many

people

in the long run.

However

,

this

strategy would cost billions of dollars to all

government

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governments

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around the world as building hospitals is a very expensive process.

On the other hand

, different

people

say that the best solution is

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something

different. Maybe

government

regulations, for

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example

, increasing the taxes on cigarettes in order to force

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people

out of the habit and reduce the number of lung cancer in general. There could

also

be similar regulations on unhealthy foods, resulting in lower rates of heart diseases or cardiovascular

problems

.

This

strategy,

in addition

to all the

health

benefits, would

also

bring in a lot of tax

money

for the

government

to invest in other public sectors,

such

as education or the circulation system. An alternative solution may be for

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people

to

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responsabilise

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responsible

themselves and for them to willingly take care of their

health

by eating better, doing more sports and having healthier habits.

This

would have the same public

health

benefits as the previous option but will

also

take a lot of stress off of the public healthcare system. In my opinion, the

second

group of

people

are the more sensible ones, the

first

option would help save lives and hundreds of thousands of dollars,

also

bringing in lots of

money

from taxes that could be invested anywhere. As for the

second

option, it is time for

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people

to realise the

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immense

stress that presses upon the different healthcare systems around the world. I

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that

people

should indeed have better habits in

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, in order to help themselves and

other

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others

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. I personally disagree with the

first

opinion as it would be extremely expensive and does not consist of helping the

people

get healthier and resposabilizing them, but

instead

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spending billions of dollars to treat them and give

money

away to the big pharma groups. In summary, the

first

opinion for me is not the most appropriate as it only is about treating

problems

that could be avoided, all

this

at a really high cost

in addition

to that.

While

, the

second

peint

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point

of view is all about helping

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people

not get any

health

problems

in the

first

place, all

while

earning

money

for the

government

.

Thus

,

i

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stand with the

second

group of

people

.