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Although you are meant to present your thesis project in one month, your sister is getting married in Spain at the same time. You would like to change dates for your presentation. Write a letter to your professor. In your letter: · Explain the situation · Remind the professor of your academic achievements to date · Ask for a different date to present your thesis

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Dear Mr Jackson Unfortunately, I have to let you know I will not be able to present my thesis project in one month. I am very sorry about
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 situation but my lovely sister is getting married in Spain at the same time. I regret that I don't inform you earlier but the wedding plans have changed too. As you know I have a presentation about bugs' nightlife, it is a very interesting innovative topic with a fresh point of view about these interesting creatures. I believe our research allows me to get to Oxford University so the presentation is crucial for me. I realize that I am asking for a big favour but can we establish a different date for presenting my thesis? The wedding is on the 5th of May so every date after the ceremony is convenient for me. I know it is a difficult situation but
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 wedding is very important for me and my family. I am sure you will understand my position. Sorry again about
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 situation and hope you will give me the answer as soon as possible Sincerely
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coherence cohesion
Include a clear opening statement to set the context of your letter right from the beginning.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single idea to make your letter more coherent.
task achievement
You've covered all the required points and provided sufficient details, making your response complete and effective.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is respectful and appropriate for the context.
coherence cohesion
You've used a proper greeting and closing, which lends a formal tone to your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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