Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

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Language

is a very special thing that we humans have incredibly

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that it is the single thing that

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then

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, the same can not be said today as technological advancement

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been getting through

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developments that it now could do languages as we human does it, and with it, rose an argument that since machines could store and

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basically any information from any

language

, we, especially our younger ones, don't need to shed a sweat learning a new

language

as the machine could do it for us. But, I do not agree

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, as it puts our human most

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aside and disrespectfully

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our ability

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new things. Machines, backed with huge databases and

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flow of

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, are basically a word bank for any

languages

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that is

present in the world, and with it, we could harness the power of translation

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a click of a button. Ever get lost in a foreign country and you want to ask for direction? Do not fret, just open up

google translate

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and type in what you want to ask in the search box.

While

it is extremely helpful, we should not leave the process of learning a

language

just because we have tools to help us.

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is especially true for children, as completely leaving the process of learning any new\

language

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their mother

language

could make them reliant on technology and will make them unprepared for the diversity of languages outside their home country.

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, learning a new

language

is always relevant and can never be replaced with any translation services. Children

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to learn new

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languages

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and not be reliant

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technology to assist them in their multicultural journey.

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In your response, stay on topic and directly address the question prompt. Develop your points with clear, relevant examples and avoid going off on tangents or including unnecessary details.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
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Finally
In a nutshell
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Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school. Why is this? What other skills do you think it is important to be taught in schools?

Nowadays, some people choose to have their first child at an older age. Do the advantages of having children at an older age outweigh the disadvantages?

You are disturbed by the noise coming from a restaurant opened nearby recently. write a letter to the restaurant manager and say 1. what problem do you experience 2. what should the management do about it 3. what you will do if the problem is not resolved

Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Nowadays, children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some think that these activities are not beneficial for a child’s mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?