Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

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is a very special thing that we humans have incredibly

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that it is the single thing that

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, the same can not be said today as technological advancement

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been getting through

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developments that it now could do languages as we human does it, and with it, rose an argument that since machines could store and

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basically any information from any

language

, we, especially our younger ones, don't need to shed a sweat learning a new

language

as the machine could do it for us. But, I do not agree

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, as it puts our human most

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aside and disrespectfully

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our ability

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new things. Machines, backed with huge databases and

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flow of

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, are basically a word bank for any

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that is

present in the world, and with it, we could harness the power of translation

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a click of a button. Ever get lost in a foreign country and you want to ask for direction? Do not fret, just open up

google translate

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and type in what you want to ask in the search box.

While

it is extremely helpful, we should not leave the process of learning a

language

just because we have tools to help us.

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is especially true for children, as completely leaving the process of learning any new\

language

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their mother

language

could make them reliant on technology and will make them unprepared for the diversity of languages outside their home country.

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, learning a new

language

is always relevant and can never be replaced with any translation services. Children

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to learn new

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and not be reliant

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technology to assist them in their multicultural journey.

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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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