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Describe a skill you learnt in your childhood. you should say who taught you this skill, what skill they taught you , where you learnt it and explain why you think it is an important skill.

#skill #learnt #childhood
A skill, I learned in my childhood was swimming, it was taught by my father, he trained me
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different strokes at the hometown
pool
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,
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 early
swiming
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swimming
 builds
children
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 muscles and bones strong
as well as
developed
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self confidence
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. I remember, in the
begning
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beginning
 sections, I had
fear
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from
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 running water, but with the passage of time , regular practice
develops
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 confidence and gradually I
become
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 perfect,
therefore
 I decided to teach swimming to young
once
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 in
bigger
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 and
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advance
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pool
 of
down town
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downtown
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, which
have
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 latest
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 for
pool
 sterilization and pump machines to generate artificial waves with different pressures, it will be
saver
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 and easier for new learners. I was trained
,
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 when my age was 15 years old, but I realized the best age to
start
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save
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swinning
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swimming
winning
swinging
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pool
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 is 5 years because
in
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this
 age children
musles
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muscles
 motor and sensory responses are fully developed.
Some times
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, in water there is
to
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 high chlorine concentration and no proper micobes
maintance
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maintenance
, which causes
sever
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severe
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 ear and throat infections, there are few scales come in
market
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the market
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,which
detects
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detect
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 the water contimination and make an
enviroment
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environment
 protective.
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Structure
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Coherence
Make certain that each paragraph flows logically to the next. Use cohesive devices such as conjunctions, transition phrases, and pronouns to connect ideas and paragraphs together.
Task Response
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Examples
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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