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Band 6.5

The maps below show Hunderstone town at present and a proposed plan for it.

The two maps illustrate the present form and the changes, which will be implemented in the future in Hunderstone town. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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 in the future will be constructed new
road
Use synonyms
 A4, meanwhile, some buildings will not experience any changes.
Firstly
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,
in
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apply
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the proposed plan will be
new
Correct article usage
a new
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 circular
road
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 in the middle of
railway
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the railway
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.
Moreover
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,
airfield
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the airfield
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 is going to be reconstructed
to
Change preposition
into
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the
Correct article usage
an
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 industrial estate and will be connected to the railway.
However
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, the roundabout in the middle of
A2
Correct article usage
the A2
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road
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 will not witness any differences. Look at the maps for more detail,
it is clear that
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 in future
will
Correct pronoun usage
there will
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 be established new
road
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 A4, which will connect the A2
road
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, railway and town centre.
In addition
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, the gas station and town centre will be in the same place and will not see any changes.
Whereas
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, the build-up area ring
road
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 will be reduced in size.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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