The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.
The given three maps display the
amendmends
that happened to a city named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.
Correct your spelling
amendments
Overall
, it is evident that the landscape of the city became more urbanised, and some amenities like shops, sports
Correct word choice
and sports
field
were added over the period.
Looking more closely at the time frame between 1780 and 1860, the transportation infrastructure was developed, a bridge and a road were built. Fix the agreement mistake
fields
In addition
, the number
of homes doubled, and also
the number
of villages increased at that period. However
, the prevalence of farms and wood decreased.
Turning to the changes between 1860 and 2000, the number
of villages and houses continued to rise, in
particular
the Add the comma(s)
particular,
number
of homes rose more than two times. Several shops were constructed along
with
the river, Change preposition
apply
moreover
a wetland was built at the south end of the river. Finally
, sports fields and schools were placed, where the wood had stood before.Submitted by ilaydailday on
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