Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views ang give your own opinions.

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Nowadays, with the
developing
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development
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of technology_people can watch films or
movies
on their
phone
or
ipad
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iPad
. They do not need to go to the
cinema
to watch
movies
like before. On the
orther
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other
hand, there are some people
prefer
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who prefer
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to watch
movies
in the
cinema
, it is more enjoyable and fun as well. We will discuss both views in
this
essay. First of all, it is so convenient to use phones or tablets to watch
movies
because it is small and easy to hold in our
hand
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hands
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and we do not have
pay
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to pay
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much money to watch it. I just paid 10$ every month to watch my
favorite
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favourite
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movies
, it is cheap and
flexiable
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flexible
. Rather than we have to go to the
cinema
, we could see
movies
at home with our little electric
divice
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device
.
Secondly
, it
is helping
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helps
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you to entertainment wherever you need it.
For example
, when I had a trip with my friends
in
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Ha Long Bay and we stayed there for 3 nights. At
the
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apply
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night
time
, we had nothing to do so we just watched
movies
though
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on
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our
tablet
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tablets
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and we had a good
time
together. On the
orther
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other
hand, there are a lot of
adventages
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advantages
to
watch
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watching
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movies
in the theatre can not be denied. We would have a wonderful
time
together with
your family at the
cinema
and it is a great memory. I do remember one
time
I
have been
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was
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invited to watch a new movie at the
cinema
with my family and it was a good movie. The sound was so good there
compare
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compared
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with our
phone
and it was a big screen at the
cinema
, it will make
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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for everyone even with uneasy customers.
To sum up
, it is good to watch
movie
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a movie
the movie
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in both choices. Even with our
phone
or you have to go to the
cinema
but it
depend
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depends
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on the situation. If you want to enjoy
by
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apply
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yourself, you could watch on your
phone
or
you
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if you
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want to have a good
time
with your family or friends, you can go to the
cinema
.
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