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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The two graphs below illustrate the survey on degrees in different Australian regions on a daily basis and a medium number of
days
 with rainfall.
Overall
, the line shows
Brisband
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Brisbane
city
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City
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, which suffered the highest daily temperature in Australia and the chart indicates that September with the least rainfall in
both
 cities. In the line chart, the minimum daily temperatures in Jan in Brishand at over 20, 5 more than in Canberra, over the 8
months
,
both
 figures witnessed a sharp decrease, and until September
both
 figures increased significantly to 20 and 12 respectively.
Similarly
, the maximum in average daily temperatures, in Jan share the same number, during 10
months
,
both
 figures decline remarkably before climbing to nearly 30. In the bar chart, the number of
days
 with rainfall in Brisbane started at over 12 in Jan,
then
 increased continuously 2
months
 later.
However
, in May it witnessed a remarkable decline to 7
days
,
this
 figure remained unchanged during 4
months
 before rising
to12
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to 12
.
In contrast
,
in
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Canberra accounted for just around 7
days
 in the first 5
months
, until Jun, it raised considerably to 10
days
, and before climbing to … in the
last
 3
months
,
this
 figure stabilized
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, both, months with synonyms.
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