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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The two graphs below illustrate the survey on degrees in different Australian regions on a daily basis and a medium number of
days
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 with rainfall.
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, the line shows
Brisband
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Brisbane
city
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City
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, which suffered the highest daily temperature in Australia and the chart indicates that September with the least rainfall in
both
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 cities. In the line chart, the minimum daily temperatures in Jan in Brishand at over 20, 5 more than in Canberra, over the 8
months
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,
both
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 figures witnessed a sharp decrease, and until September
both
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 figures increased significantly to 20 and 12 respectively.
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, the maximum in average daily temperatures, in Jan share the same number, during 10
months
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,
both
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 figures decline remarkably before climbing to nearly 30. In the bar chart, the number of
days
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 with rainfall in Brisbane started at over 12 in Jan,
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 increased continuously 2
months
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 later.
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, in May it witnessed a remarkable decline to 7
days
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,
this
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 figure remained unchanged during 4
months
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 before rising
to12
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to 12
.
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in
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Canberra accounted for just around 7
days
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 in the first 5
months
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, until Jun, it raised considerably to 10
days
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, and before climbing to … in the
last
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 3
months
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,
this
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 figure stabilized

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words days, both, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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