The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of estimated illiteracy people in six regions from the
last
year, divided by gender. The rates were measured in percentages.
Overall
, countries with the highest illiteracy rates were Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
.
However
, in all regions, there were more
women
who could not read or write rather than
men
.
Last
year, South
Asia
was the most illiterate area, and the number of illiterate
women
was almost twofold
men
's number (about 56% and 32%, respectively).
Moreover
, it was followed by Arab States, with about 53% of
women
and around 29% of
men
. In Africa, illiterate females were almost 50% of the
women
population and approximately 32% of
men
were illiterate.
In contrast
, developed countries, Latin American/Caribbean, and East
Asia
/Oceania showed big differences, in which almost all of the population was literate. In developed countries, the level of illiteracy was close to zero.
Additionally
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were no significant dissimilarities in
men
's and
women
's illiterate rates in Latin America, with only around 10% of the populace. Meanwhile, illiterate
women
in East
Asia
/Oceania over-doubled the
men
's percentage (around 20% and 8%, respectively).
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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